Saturday, March 7, 2009

Choose your own adventure..

Okay so that title may be a tad misleading.. So I've started working on not one but two books. Writing two books at once is not what I would prefer to do though. I like to stick with just one at a time so that I can really devote myself to the characters and the story, that way it ends up being better developed in the end. So, I'd like your help. I'm going to post here the beginnings of both.. not much, really.. just snippets. But enough to give you a glimpse of what the story will be about. And if you ask nicely, I may post excerpts of my progress as I go along. While you all assist me with this, I'm going to work on my plot outlines this weekend so that whichever one I write, I know where I'm going with it.

Remember folks, these are first drafts.

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“I never thought we'd end up here..” he said softly, taking my hand as we sat together in the quiet and near empty waiting room. I looked down at our hands, fingers intertwined. The contrast of his dark skin on mine, so pale, made my vision blur and it was as if my world turned to black and white. Black and white, that's what we were, and that's what we thought this decision was. We felt like we had no choice. You do, said a small voice in my head.. Do I?

It wasn't something spur of the moment. It wasn't out of the blue. But rather, something that had built up inside both of us for years. Attraction. Intrigue. Longing. It built up to a point where it could no longer be denied, no matter how wrong or how inappropriate. Neither of us could hide our feelings from each other any longer. And so it began.

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“You're lying.” he said with a cold sadness in his eyes.
He was right. I was lying. Lying to him, lying to myself, lying to everyone.. and I had to stop. I couldn't do it anymore. I was miserable, and if I didn't get out now, I'd make everyone else miserable too. But I had no where to go. I had never felt so alone in all my life.

“I have to go.” I said quietly staring at my wringing hands, not wanting to look at him.
“Go where?” he asked, sounding suspicious and irritated.
“I don't know.. anywhere but here.” I answered.
And with that, I stood and walked out the door.

That was almost 2 years ago. And I never imagined I'd find myself here. I thought for sure I was destined to wander alone. I felt like I needed to be alone. Not for my own good, but for the good of everyone around me. I was certain that I was destined to hurt everyone I came into contact with. I felt toxic. So I left. But I suppose that's not really where the story begins. I didn't end up like that on my own, and I think that anyone who has known the pain of betrayal has a right to a certain amount of bitterness and cynicism. Yes, that's right, betrayal.

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So? What do you think? Which one sounds more intriguing? Which one leaves you wanting to know more?

21 comments:

Petra a.k.a The Wise (*Young*) Mommy said...

woo-hoo! First!

I like the sound of the first one personally. I am dying to know what they are up to!

Anonymous said...

I'm intrigued by the second one. What could have made her feel that she is "toxic"?

Mary@Holy Mackerel said...

Whew! Hard choice. I really like both of them!!

Amy said...

I think #2. but maybe thats cause i know to much already. Mwahhahaha!!!!

Pamela said...

Oh please, please, please, don't make me choose!

Pamela said...

I am super helpful that way.

Unknown said...

I like them both but where you are making me choose, I'd say the first one.

Kat said...

I like the 2nd one

Irish Gumbo said...

THE SECOND ONE. More please :)

And the caption in your header makes me sing "Hey, pretty, don't you want to take a ride with me?"...stupid car commercial won;t get out of my head now....

Hey, how are ya?

Jon Dayton said...

First one. And please post your writing ALL the time. Three words: DE LISH US!

Captain Dumbass said...

First one. But where are the zombies?

sAm said...

oh...I like them both. But if forced to choose, I'd say the first. And this is my simple polite request to read more excerpts--please?

Only Aman said...

You know what's really crazy, is that I know what both of these stories are based on. Both of them have a strong base story, but I am sure that @ChurchPunkMom's embellishment will make either story fantastic, even if they both make me uncomfortable (that's right and only she can do that to me).

I vote for number two...

Isn't @ChurchPunkMom a hot writer!

-Aman

FoN said...

Hmmmm, they are both very good but if I had to pick? I'd vote the second. Are you going to post anymore 'snippets'? :)

Mama Dawg said...

Well, shit. Both are intriguing.

I guess I have to go with the second one. For now.

Keely said...

Hm, hard to choose. But I think the second one.

We'd all love for you to post it ALL, but careful about that!

Anonymous said...

Oh this is a hard one. I really like both quite a lot. And ..... I'm leaning towards the first, but only by a smidgen. I think maybe you should do BOTH at the same time. If you get writer's block on one, you could start in on the other for awhile and vice versa.

Kurt N. said...

I'll vote numero dos.

Mr. Kelly said...

I would pick story number one. Why are they in a waiting room? I need to know.

Teri said...

I vote the second. It sounds like there is much more conflict and you know how an audience loves conflict....crazy nutjobs that we are....(plus the black and w hite thing doesn't really bother me and so it doesn't interest me nor do I consider it an interesting conflict in the first place lol)

that girl said...

One is the bigger hook.

I envy your husband's attitude here - I feel like every valid story I could tell would hurt him or rub him the wrong way or, at the very least, make him sad..

You're lucky in that way.

 
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